Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Real Madrid C.F./archive4

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 17:40, 30 September 2007.

Real Madrid C.F.

I think the article is good enough for FA. --Hadrianos1990 14:01, 23 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

• Comment please remove the nomination for GA if you wish to pursue this. The Rambling Man 14:55, 23 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
•  Done i've removed the nomination --Hadrianos1990 15:08, 23 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

As the previous nom was closed as recently as 19th September (archived here) doesn't this seem a little premature? --Dweller 16:45, 23 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Oppose - issues:

• Still a number of WP:MOS issues - particularly WP:CITE - citation placement.
  •  Done I think this is done.--Hadrianos1990 14:17, 29 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
• Insufficient citation for both Statistics and Supporters section.
  •  Done More citations added.--Hadrianos1990 14:18, 29 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
• Did Johnson and Carcel really manage the club for zero games?
  •  Done Problem resolved.--Hadrianos1990 14:17, 29 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
• Are presidents useful to the article? Consider creating a sub-article and writing prose here about the notable ones. Ditto with the managers really, talk about the notable ones but create a sub-article with the whole lot.
  •  Done Reorganize managers section.--Hadrianos1990 14:06, 29 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  •  Done Deleted presidents section.--Hadrianos1990 14:06, 29 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
• The honours section looks awful. Re-organise, write some prose and cite record.
  •  Done Citations added. Reorganized.--Hadrianos1990 14:17, 29 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Hope these help. The Rambling Man 18:51, 23 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comment

• "The Bernabéu has the proud record of having hosted the European Cup final (in 1957, 1969 and 1980), the 1964 European Championship final (1964), and the FIFA World Cup final (1982)." Why are the years in brackets? Also "proud" is redundant. Buc 08:25, 26 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  •  Done Problem solved. Phrase re-formed.--Hadrianos1990 14:19, 29 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

• Well just passing by, I think that should be in the Bernabeu article in anycase, since hosting the UCL Champions League final and the WC final is not related to the performance of RM. Blnguyen (bananabucket) 02:48, 28 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comment

• Lead is just 8 sentences, forming two paragraphs. Five of the sentences start with Real Madrid... three start Real Madrid is... too many sentences starting the same isnt good prose.
  •  Done Problem resolved --Hadrianos1990 17:42, 30 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
• Madrid is link twice in the lead once in each paragraph
  •  Done Problem resolved --Hadrianos1990 17:42, 30 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
• a Spanish professional football club based in Madrid, Spain redundant Spanish/Spain
  •  Done Problem resolved --Hadrianos1990 17:42, 30 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
• Also the section called notable players, appears to be redundant as there is any commentary maybe the link should be at the top of the section Players.
  •  Done Problem resolved --Hadrianos1990 17:42, 30 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
    

In its current form I'd opposeGnangarra 11:20, 30 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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