Template:Did you know nominations/Kronans Apotek

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: rejected by Yoninah (talk) 19:12, 3 July 2018 (UTC)
Article issues unresolved

Kronans Apotek

  • ... that in 1967, sales in Kronans Apotek amounted to 31,3 million SEK, of which 28 million SEK were to pharmacies?

Created by Newroderick895 (talk). Self-nominated at 19:05, 10 April 2018 (UTC).

  • Comment: Remember to wikilink and bold the article in the hook. I've taken the liberty of doing this for you above. (: There's also a grammatical error, which I've fixed too.―Biochemistry🙴 04:21, 29 April 2018 (UTC)
  • New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced. No close paraphrasing seen in 2 English-language sources; the rest of sources are foreign-language. No QPQ needed for new nominator.
  • A few issues:
  1. I do not think the company logo is correctly licensed. It is lifted from a website. It should probably be re-licensed as "Fair use" on Wikipedia (not on Commons, which doesn't accept fair use licensing).
  2. The book refs to Swedish-language books should be reformatted per Wikipedia:Citation templates. The publisher is not Google Books, but the publisher of the book. The title is not the isbn number, but the title of the book, etc. If you need help, let me know.
  3. The hook reads more like a business brief than a hook. Try to find something that's catchy or surprising. That 400% increase in sales, for example, is hooky. A hook could also be made out of the historical details.
  • I've struck the hook as I concur with Yoninah that the hook is not appropriate. Please propose a new hook. In addition, no major edits have been done to the article since the review: please make the necessary edits. Finally, the sentence "In 1959 a consortium owned by the company Kronans Droghandel was bought." is unreferenced. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 13:04, 6 June 2018 (UTC)
  • No edits have been made to the article since my review a month ago and Narutolovehinata5's ping over 2 weeks ago. Marking for closure as unsuccessful. Yoninah (talk) 22:09, 23 June 2018 (UTC)
I've left a final message on the nominator's talk page. Let's wait and see if he will reply; if he doesn't reply in a few days to a week, then this nomination can be closed. Note though that the nominator has not edited since the 21st. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:22, 24 June 2018 (UTC)
  • Editor has still not replied to talk page messages and has not edited since June 25. Endorsing Yoninah's marking for closure. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 12:43, 3 July 2018 (UTC)
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