Wikipedia:WikiProject Peru/Peer review/Peru national football team

Peru national football team

The Peru national football team article has been greatly improved since the last check was done. At the moment, Peru's football article actually stands out as looking as one of the best. Yet, the most serious problem that prevented the article from being considered for something much better has been the lack of citations several parts of the article has (which is mainly a problem that roots itself not from false statements, but rather from the lack of citations the Spanish article from which the information was taken had). Football is the most popular sport of Peru, so lets show Wikipedia that a great article can be made about the nation's team.

I'm making this peer review request on behalf of MarshalN20 who is one of the main contributors to the article and wrote the introduction shown above. --Victor12 19:30, 20 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Victor12

Here are some comments:

Structure

It seems to me this article needs some major restructuring as it currently has too many sections some of which contain redundant information. A good starting point for improvements is Wikipedia:WikiProject Football/National teams which provides a model on how to organize national teams articles. To comply with its guidelines the following recommendations should be implemented:

• The History, La Blanquirroja in the FIFA World Cup, Copa América and La Blanquirroja in other tournaments should probably be merged under History so as to not divide the History of the team in four sections. A good example on how to do this is Scotland national football team which has a good History section and then short sections on its World Cup and European Championship records.
• "La Blanquirroja" should not be used to name the team as it is not encyclopedic to call things by its nicknames.
• "Famous players" should be renamed "Noted players"
• The "Players Recently Retired from the Team" section should be deleted and relevant players listed under "Noted players".
• The "List of Recent International Matches" section should be deleted. Relevant matches should be listed in the History section or in the World Cup and Copa America records sections.
• The "Under 17 Team" section is relevant enough and long enough to be moved to its own article.
• The "Trivia" section should be deleted per Wikipedia:Avoid trivia sections and relevant info moved elsewhere in the article.
• It might be useful to use a template for the "See also" section, something similar to {{Football in Scotland}}.
• The "Titles" section seems redundant and should probably be deleted.

Prose

• Prose needs major work as many parts seem literally translated from Spanish. Thus, it needs to be checked for grammar and ortography.
• It also needs some major work to get rid of POV such as "Later, between 1970 and 1982, a Golden Generation of Peruvian footballers once more brought Peru into the view of the world".
• The sames goes for anecdotes

Sources

• Major work required here also. Youtube links should definitely be removed. Alternative sites for references include BBC sports and other international news agencies, specially as English links should be preferred in the English Wikipedia.
• If someone could get his hands on books about the team, that would be a major improvement for the article.
• Many more references are needed for the article

That's all for now, there's great potential for this article, but it needs major work by dedicated editors