Wikipedia:Peer review/Thierry Henry/archive2

Thierry Henry

Hope to make this a FAC after this PR. Buc 17:08, 31 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 17:21, 31 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Mattythewhite

  • Date of birth should be in brackets.
    • Could you point out which? I thought the one in the lead is paranthesised already. Chensiyuan 23:39, 3 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
      • Bole2's already done this. Mattythewhite 15:33, 6 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • The first parapragh of "Early career" includes only one paragraph. It'll need a lot more.
  • I'm not too sure on him being referedd to as "the young player" or the "13 year old" - reads like a newspaper.
    • I disagree with that :) I didn't write that part but it sounds fine to me. But I see it's been edited anyway. Chensiyuan 00:52, 4 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • More endashes are needed for seasons.
  • The reference after "This combined with his pace" needs moving to the end of the sentence - but the claim the whole sentence makes needs a reference itself.
  • Reference should be used for statistics. And for Honours, theres a lot of them!
    • Will try to look for reliable sources because soccernet only provides for up till 1999 I think. As for your comment on Honours, do you mean the list is too long or the list is unreferenced? Chensiyuan 00:52, 4 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Its in a very good state. Not too far off a FAC now. Mattythewhite 20:40, 3 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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