Wikipedia:Peer review/Mexico–United States border/archive2

Mexico–United States border

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I've listed this article for peer review because…

The introduction could use a reworking, I would list that it is the most frequently crossed border in the world in the first sentence, as that is crucial information. I also think the Geography section is in desperate need of a map, as there is great descriptions but without any map to contextualize it, the descriptions are hard to put into perspective. Under history, the sentence "Border treaties are jointly administered by the International Boundary and Water Commission (IBWC), which was established in 1889 to maintain the border, allocate river waters between the two nations, and provide for flood control and water sanitation. Once viewed as a model of international cooperation, in recent decades the IBWC has been heavily criticized as an institutional anachronism, by-passed by modern social, environmental and political issues.[7] In particular, jurisdictional issues regarding water rights in the Rio Grande Valley have continued to cause tension between farmers along the border, according to Mexican political scientist Armand Peschard-Sverdrup.[15][16]" should be at the forefront of the paragraph describing "Later History", as it is awkward where it is placed after much discussion about border treaties. The article would benefit with discussion about other crucial border entry locations, as it is strange that Tijuana is the only border entry station that is discussed. The Security section should be further towards the beginning of the article. This is one of the main points of contention when it comes to borders, so readers are eager to learn about it at the beginning of their reading of the article. The Biden administration section is lacking, especially with so much details in Trump's section. The transborder student section is extremely well written and interesting.

Thanks, Meganfarley65 (talk) 20:50, 26 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Meganfarley65: Peer reviews are for editors to request help and advice on how to improve upon an article. Based on what you wrote above, it looks like you already have some ideas on how to improve upon the article. Can we close this and you can bring this back to PR when the above have been fixed? Z1720 (talk) 18:23, 29 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Since this editor's last contribution Wikipedia was to open this PR, I am going to close this. The editor can open a new PR when they return and address the concerns they have listed above. Z1720 (talk) 23:24, 20 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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