Talk:Whistle (Blackpink song)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs)) 21:49, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

The time has arrived and I am available to review one of your articles over this weekend and will get on with this one shortly, after I raised the possiblity! --K. Peake 21:49, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

• The Black Label studio is not sourced anywhere
• Mention in the opening sentence that it is "for their debut single album, Square One (2016)"
• "It was released" → "The song was released" and re-word this sentence to mentioning they were released simultaneously as singles from the album
• "the group's second single album" → "the group's second single album," although this should be sourced in background and composition
• ""Whistle" was written and" → "The song was written and"
• "Musically, the song consists of" → "Musically, it consists of"
• Wikilink drum and bass
• The booming and exotic quotes are unsourced, although they could easily be replaced with the description that is written in comp
• "including heartbeats and whistles—alluding to the title of the track." → "including whistles and a heartbeat—alluding to the title." to be more specific
• "among the best releases" → "among the best K-pop releases"
• ""Whistle" claimed the number-one position" → "the song held the number-one position"
• "marking their first" → "marking Blackpink's first"
• I feel like you should also reference the World Digital Songs position here
• "the song's accompanying music video garnered over ten million" → "the accompanying music video garnered over 10 million" per MOS:NUM, with the wikilink
• There should be some info re the synopsis of the mv in its section and then add an overview here, please
• Pipe Best Music Video to MAMA Award for Best Music Video
• "with "Whistle" on" → "with the song on"
• "and continued to promote the song" → "and continued with promotion"

Background and composition

• "On July 29," → "On July 29, 2016,"
• "to be the two title tracks" maybe try something like "first two singles" instead since these are certainly not title tracks nor does the source use that term
• "Teddy and Bekuh Boom," → "Teddy, and Bekuh Boom,"
• "Stylistically, "Whistle" has been" → "Musically, "Whistle" has been"
• Remove overly obvious wikilink on guitar

Critical reception

• "garnered generally positive reviews" → "was met with positive reviews" since there is no negative ones here
• The song titles inside the Rolling Stone quote should be surrounded by singular speech marks instead per MOS:QWQ
• Put more of the Entertainment Weekly review into your own words; I would suggest re-wording the end part to something like "observed that the song would be suitable for American charts."
• "opening "Hey boy," it's" → "opening 'Hey boy,' it's"
• "the 6th best" → "the 4th best" per the source and archive too
• "feel impossibly fresh."" → "feel impossibly fresh"." per MOS:QUOTE

Accolades

• This does not have enough awards to warrant the tables, nor does it to become a section since these can be moved to critical reception and I believe the music video ones should go in its section after the video's general info
• Pipe Gaon Chart Music Awards to Circle Chart Music Awards

Commercial performance

• The 17 million streams are not sourced and if you can, shouldn't it be written out like you did with 10 million for consistency?
• Ditto for the Korea Music Content Association information

Music video and live performances

• Remove duplicate wikilink on YouTube
• "ten million views" → "10 million views" per MOS:NUM
• Add some info about the video synopsis, either using any sources you can find or the video itself as a source
• Pipe Gaon Chart Music Awards to Circle Chart Music Awards
• I noticed numerous translated sources mention them performing but do not state they performed "Whistle"; please ensure this is included or else remove

Credits and personnel

• Looks good, although if there is a studio I would suggest to add here

Charts

• See MOS:TABLECAPTION
  •  Not done per Template:Screen reader-only, as I don't see the point in redundant table captions. There was also a discussion about this (Wikipedia talk:Manual of Style/Accessibility#Making redundant table captions screen-reader-only) where it was essentially determined that sr-only templates are okay to use.

Release history

• Good

See also

• Good

References

• Copyvio score looks great at 21.3%!!!
• Pipe Sports Dong-a to The Dong-a Ilbo and wikilink Naver on ref 2
• MOS:QWQ issues with refs 4, 24 and 48
• MOS:QWQ issues with ref 10 and pipe Respect Mag to Respect (magazine)
• Pipe Insider to Business Insider on ref 15
• WP:OVERLINK of Billboard on refs 15, 16, 34, 35, 52 and 56
• WP:OVERLINK of The Korea Herald on refs 20 and 41, fix MOS:QWQ issues with the last one too
• WP:OVERLINK of Gaon Music Chart on refs 25, 26, 29, 30, 31, 32, 33, 53 and 54
• Refs 27 and 28 are not properly formatted as refs with titles
• Wikilink YouTube on ref 36
• Cite Naver as via instead and fix MOS:QWQ issues on ref 38
• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 42
• Ref 49 needs a new archive url since the current one is for the Yahoo! consent page
• Pipe Melon to Melon (online music service) on ref 50
• Ref 55 needs proper formatting for the access date

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; knew this would not take too long! --K. Peake 10:18, 17 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

 Done all, thanks for you through review once again! Please let me know if I have missed anything. ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 00:02, 18 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

• ✓ Pass now, up to scratch with your previous GAs for sure and I only did some brief copy editing! --K. Peake 08:57, 18 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]