Talk:Thomas Highgate/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 02:33, 29 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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Most of the issues are minor copy edits. One reference is redundantly cited. And that's it. 7-day hold to Unexpectedlydian; ping me when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • tc) 02:53, 29 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Sammi Brie, thanks for the review! I have responded to everything below. Just one question about title case. Do let me know if you need anything else. Unexpectedlydian♯4talk 14:52, 29 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@Unexpectedlydian I tend to preserve the original casing of references unless all caps. Sammi Brie (she/her • tc) 17:30, 29 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Hi @Sammi Brie, thanks - I have changed those citations now to the original case. Unexpectedlydian♯4talk 13:27, 1 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Copy changes

Lead

Early life

  • Consider styling "World War One" as "World War I" for consistency
    • Done.

First World War

  • 40,000 British soldiers fought in the battle and 7,800 were killed in the battle Add a comma after the first "in the battle" and remove the second one.
    • Thanks, done.
  • Find and replace the three times in the article where soldier is misspelled "solider".
    • Oops! Done.
  • Add a comma after "said to the gatekeeper"
    • Done.
  • In court, Highgate said that he remembered walking around, entering the farm, lying down in a civilian house, putting on civilian clothes, but did not recall much else. Add a comma before "putting" and remove the one after "clothes"
    • Done.
  • There were other instances of soldiers looting, travelling with civilians, and one allegation of rape. Not the most consistent list. Maybe There were other instances of soldiers looting and travelling with civilians, as well as one allegation of rape.
    • Fixed.
  • Highgate was accused of desertion and a Field General Court-Martial was arranged a few hours after he was discovered in the farm house. Comma after "desertion" (CinS)
    • Done.

Sourcing and spot checks

Earwig flags a few unavoidable formulations and quotes from Putkowski. No issue here.

  • I notice that several reference titles have been converted to title case when the original titles were in sentence case. Is there a reason for this?
    • No, to be honest I don't know the rules. I can change the relevant ones back to sentence case if needed?
  • The BBC News article "Shot at dawn, pardoned 90 years on" is separately cited twice (ref 11 and 20). Consolidate.
    • Fixed.

Five references were chosen for random spot checks: with no issues.

  • 7: The National Archives reference is used nine different times with no issue: checkY
    • Memory loss
    • Good worker
    • BEF retreat
    • Found in civilian clothes without a rifle
    • Lack of memory of the incident
    • "Wider disciplinary concerns"
    • Bedfordshire executioners
    • 7:07 time of death
    • Cheshire and Dorset witnesses
  • 14: Johnson 2015 p. 109 includes the "should be killed as quickly as possible" line. checkY
  • 16: British Legion opposition. (Consider clipping the full article!) checkY
  • 17: Split in the Royal British Legion. checkY
  • 19: Decision to wait by councilors. checkY

Encouragement: Archive references with IABot (which is down right now).

  • Thanks, I need to do that to multiple articles when it's back up.

Images

There are two images, both in a gallery at the end of the last section, of the war memorials in Shoreham and Sidcup. They are both under CC licenses. Alt text is supplied by the template for the former and specifically for the latter.

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