Talk:Series 8, Episode 1 (Spooks)/GA1

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Reviewer: 97198 (talk) 08:01, 12 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The article is looking good, and the only issues I found with it are fairly nitpicky:

• It's in the title, but the lead (probably the first sentence) should mention that the episode is the first of the eighth series
• reaction towards the overall episode were mixed - "reactions ... were mixed" or "the reaction ... was mixed"
• There are three sentences in a row in the first Plot paragraph that are split by semicolons - could you do some rewording to make the reading flow a bit easier?
• He was also easy to work with the filming crew - doesn't make sense
• Richards was quickly able to write those new scenes "seamlessly" into the rest of the episode - it's a POV-ish quote so you should clearly attribute it to someone
• The first conversation between Malcolm and Ruth were all ADR (added dialogue) - saying "the first conversation ... were" is incorrect; it would also be better to spell out the acronym "automated dialogue replacement" in brackets rather than "added dialogue"
• a location the producers never used before - "had never used"
• due to restrictions the filming crew felt they cannot follow - "they could not"
• When writing times, there should be a space between the numbers and the "am" or "pm"

The GAN will be on hold for a week to give you time to address these issues. 97198 (talk) 08:01, 12 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for reviewing this article. I have (hopefully) rectified my errors. Please let me know if some of the issues are still unresolved. -- Matthew RD 13:04, 12 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the speedy response. Everything looks fine so I'll promote the article :) 97198 (talk) 22:56, 12 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]