Talk:Malvern Water (bottled water)/Archives/2019

Holywell Bottled Water

Following the closure of the Coca-Cola Colwall bottling plant in 2010 and its subsequent sale to a property developer in October 2011, there remains one commercial bottling plant left: the original site at Holy Well dating back to the 16th century resumed commercial production after restoration, on 20th July 2009, and was expanded in November 2010 with a 330ml bottling line. On July 21st 2011, the Holywell Water Company was awarded Most Promising New Business in Herefordshire & Worcestershire 2011 by the Chamber of Commerce. [1] Elmbeard (talk) 12:49, 2 November 2011 (UTC)Elmbeard

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Reviewer: Yellow Dingo (talk · contribs) 09:02, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

I'll take this. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 09:02, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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Comments

1a

Lead and infobox
  • "water is a natural spring water" → "water is natural spring water"  Done
  • Link "Fissures" to Fissure  Done
  • "Fissures in the rock retain rain water, which slowly permeates through, escaping at the springs" → "Fissures in the rock retain rain water which then slowly permeates through before escaping at the springs"  Done
  • "The flow depends" → "The flow rate depends"  Done
  • The second paragraph doesn't really flow well. You go from talking about present day to talking about history. Then more history and then back to present day. Try to make it flow better by keeping it more in chronological order. It is also a bit confusing as you don't say if there is a plant now or, if there isn't, how the water is produced nowadays. Done
  • In the inbox capitalise "natural" as it is practically the start of a new sentence Done
History
  • 'grocers have bottled" → grocers bottled"  Done
  • "when with the aid of a Lottery Heritage grant," - missing comma between "when" and "with"  Done
  • "would be ceasing as of 3 November 2010" → "would be ceasing on 3 November 2010"  Done(rephrased)
  • "This is due" → "The decision was due"  Done(rephrased)
  • "is being sold" → "is going to be sold"  Done(rephrased)
Purity
  • "when during 2006 the rock that filters the water dried out" → "when the rock that filters the water dried out during 2006"  Done
  • "Consequently,the" - missing space  Done

2a & 2b

  • In the royalty section does the cite reference the entire paragraph or does it just reference the first sentence. If the first is true then move the cite to the end of the section. If the latter is true then find a cite for the second sentence  Done - and expanded with additional refs
  • You need a cite for "The springs release an average of about 60 litres a minute."  Done
  • Fix the ref problem in ref #15  Done now No. 17.link works but is to WayBack machine
  • References 18  Done (not dead), 9, 5, 14  Done (MHAONBWaterleafletNorthernHillsrevisedOct10_000.pdf),
8 and 15 are all dead

NOTE: These ref numbers are no longer in sequence, could you please let me know which they are again please. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:04, 2 September 2016 (UTC)

Ref numbers

Ok all ref numbers are as of this revision. I found the dead links using this tool.

  • Fix the red ref error in ref 16  Done his is now ref 17, or at least until I have added more content on the fly.
  • Link work in ref 13 to Malvern Gazette  Done This is now Ref. 12
  • Refs 10, 19, 9, 6 and 16 are dead  Done redundant refs removed, Dead links replaced with more recent URLs.
  • Bibliography ref 6 is dead  Done online link removed. This is a published book, in print and available.
  • External links 1 and 2 are dead  Done fixed and/or updated

- Yellow Dingo (talk) 01:32, 3 September 2016 (UTC) Forgot to ping you @Kudpung: - Yellow Dingo (talk) 01:45, 3 September 2016 (UTC)

Decision

Ok a bit of work to do. I'm putting this on hold - Yellow Dingo (talk) 09:38, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

@Kudpung: Just a little reminder about this, I see your almost done. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 08:14, 9 September 2016 (UTC)

Yellow Dingo. I will have it finished today or tomorrow. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:17, 10 September 2016 (UTC)
Yellow Dingo I believe this is complete now. Many sources were redundant (2 different sources for the same thing - an old habit of mine). Other dead links replaced with up-to-date sources. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 10:15, 12 September 2016 (UTC)
Looking good Kudpung. I'll take a final look at the article tomorrow and I'l hopefully will be able to promote it. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 11:47, 12 September 2016 (UTC)
Final
  • Ok I'm now satisfied this article meets the criteria. Passing. Well done Kudpung and congrats on a nice article. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 02:31, 13 September 2016 (UTC)

References

  1. ^ http://www.holywellspringwater.co.uk/news.php/
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