Talk:Cosmology of Tolkien's legendarium

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 04:13, 4 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

• Will get to this tomorrow (or rather, in a few hours UTC-wise). 𓃦LunaEatsTuna (💬) 04:13, 4 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

• Many thanks as always. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:13, 4 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

• Nice work on the changes! I can now confidently pass this article for GA status. Congrats! ツLunaEatsTuna (💬)— 14:54, 6 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Copyvio check

Earwig says good to go.

• Noted.

Files

All images are relevant, of acceptable quality, and copyright-free:

File:Arda Ambarkanta.jpg: CC-BY-SA 3.0;

File:Arda in the Ages of the Lamps.svg: CC-BY-SA 4.0;

File:Downfall of Númenor.svg: CC-BY-SA 4.0;

File:Tolkien's Imagined Prehistory.svg: CC-BY-SA 4.0;

File:Emblema Durin.svg: CC-BY-SA 3.0.

• Noted.

Prose

• "When Men try to go there" – wikilink Men in Middle-earth.
  • Done.

• "including the world, Arda and its central continent," – I believe it should be "including the world, Arda, and its central continent,"?
  • Done.

• Could the quote box be cited?
  • Done.

• "The race of the Dwarves" – wikilink Dwarves in Middle-earth.
  • Done.

• "These were co-actors" – is there a better word choice available than "co-actors"?
  • Reworded.

• Wikilink Christopher Tolkien and unlink his mention in § Planets and constellations.
  • Done.

• "during the Music of the Ainur" – this should not be wikilinked as it redirects to Ainulindalë which has already been wikilinked.
  • Done.

• "give them immortality." – I think it makes sense to wikilink immortality here.
  • Done.

• "are destined to "fade" much more rapidly," – recommend "are destined to "fade" more rapidly,"
  • Done.

• "may ultimately go to Heaven" – could Heaven in Middle-earth be expanded upon?
  • This is Shippey's thought; Tolkien does not expand upon it (beyond saying the Elves don't know about it).

• "though this is left vague in the Legendarium." – does "Legendarium" have to be capitalised?
  • No.

• "So, Shippey asks, did Elves have souls? Since they could not leave the world, the answer seems to be no; but given that they didn't disappear completely on death, the answer had to have been yes." – is quite unencyclopaedic. Rephrase.
  • Reworded.

• "as various scholars have commented" – are there too many to name individually?
  • Multiple scholars have said very similar things; listing their names won't help the average reader, and for the rare one who needs to know, the citations are right there.

• Does "Elves ("functionally immortal")" need to be cited individually? Ref 7 is already cited in Hierarchy of beings.
  • Well, if the rule is "we always cite direct quotations" then yes. And it'd be unsafe to remove the quotation marks.

• "Roman Catholicism, and that of Medieval poetry" – wikilink Roman Catholicism as first mention in the lead.
  • Done.

• "that Good and Evil are equally powerful" – are these capitalisations correct?
  • Let's try it without.

• "Avakúma is not to be confused with the state of non-being that preceded the creation of Eä." – Avakúma? This is its only mention.
  • Avoided.

• I doubt that "Ages of the Stars" and "Great Stars" need to be boldfaced.
  • Fixed.

• "Tolkien created Sindarin names for the other" – wikilink Sindarin.
  • Done.

Refs

All sources are RS. Passes spotcheck—no concerns with refs 1, 5, 8, 18, 23 or 29.

• Ref 25 has a strangely formatted archive URL parameter(s).
  • Fixed.

Other

• Short desc, See also, navs, other templates and cats good.
  • Noted.

• Could WP:ALT text be added at all?
  • Added.